Wikipedia:Peer review/Battle of Inchon/archive1
This is my first major article and I want to know what people think. I'm open for any criticisms, but I think my major problem is wording and grammar in the latter part of the article. I've spent too much time writing this to see my errors. [[User:BrokenSegue|BrokenSegue]] 22:29, 1 Nov 2004 (UTC)
- Looks fine to me. I done some work on the ilinks. Perhaps you could clarify it in the text and batlebox that the battle was not limited to Inchon, but it went as far as Seul as well (if I understand the article correctly). Perhaps the article name should be changed to Operation Chromite? --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus 12:09, 2 Nov 2004 (UTC)
- (1) Should use the templatized battlebox (see Wikipedia:WikiProject Battles). "battle before" and "battle after" are the wrong way round (2) Minor formatting stuff: image in battlebox should be as wide as the battlebox and needs a caption; don't use thumbnail style for the landing map as there's no caption. (3) There should be something about the strategic background, i.e. UN forces encircled at Pusan. (4) Why not land at Pusan and break out? (5) Some of the metric conversions are over-precise, e.g. 8 miles should convert to 13 km, not 12.8 km. (6) North Korean commander and strength is missing. (7) The casualty figures in the battlebox cover only the landings, but the article goes on to discuss the campaign that followed; maybe you need to move some material to a new article, perhaps battle of Seoul? (8) Give full names for people when first mentioned, e.g. General Forrest Sherman. (9) There are some bogus links, e.g. Admiral Doyle is linked as Doyle, which is wrong: find out his full name and link that. (10) Use intentation for quotations. (11) Needs references. Gdr 00:51, 2004 Nov 3 (UTC)
- I think I answered some of your concerns but one I'm having trouble with is the battle of seoul. The information I have says that the "battle of seuol" took place later when the Chinese entered the war. I agree the casualty number is confusing but I did write the land battle in the aftermath heading to seperate it from the main battle. [[User:BrokenSegue|BrokenSegue]]
- This still needs a better map, showing the whole peninsula for context. Something like http://www.paulnoll.com/Korea/Maps/Korean-map-Sept-1-Oct.html , or larger scans of the maps on http://www.exwar.org/Htm/8000PopE5.htm .
—wwoods 03:00, 30 Jan 2005 (UTC)